Spyder's Poetry Empire - Forum

In Reply to: Retarded posted by Jose A Zuniga

I like this, that kind of angry resignation we all have to deal with at times, all in our own different ways. The thing about your poem that strikes me is that it could have benifited from a less formal presentation. It feels like you were on the borderline of saying it in flowery old enlish, or in the way most people talk when they are pouring out their feelings...but that could be my impression.I just feel that it would be better in another language, if that makes any sense. Either way, I enjoyed it.